15 March, 2011

JOURNEY



The little wooden boats, the ones that gently rocked when you blew at them, cost thirty Rupees at the village fair . Rickety little things, that never left shore enough to touch another. This one was different though. The minute he clutches at it’s smooth, symmetrical polish – scented edges , he knew. He also knew it was not to be owned. The setting sun rippling on the river, the perfect postcard background for the grand launch; he let it go – envisioning it’s grand travels along it’s puny path on the mighty river.
And it travelled. It touched Benares and carried a whiff of the evening “aarti”. It touched Bengal, and the “baul” song reverberated in intoxicated rhythms from it’s then ripped sails. Somewhere in Howrah, a girl touched it during her late afternoon splash. And she saw the ‘pujari ’in his pot bellied , ‘tilak’- in –place splendor. She felt the cool breeze of Rishikesh , just a draft – but nonetheless. And then it stole away, leaving behind the illiterate girl with a glimpse of a highly coloured , high school geography book dream.
The shepherd found it in some crevice of the almost frozen river. Motion was difficult then. The smooth flowing meanderings replaced by icy obstacles. He breathed in long forgotten summer dreams in its hollowed length. It was like the last time he had picked mangoes in the orchard, he could still taste it on his tongue tips, the uniquely mango-ish juicy sweetness. The thrill of secretive climbing of forbidden trees.
And having delivered that last smile from far-off lands ; it breathed it’s last in the icicle cave. A furry creature scurried forth. Somewhere there were meadows with enough sun and trees.

7 comments:

Devaki S said...

liked it when you read in the class, love it now. the narration is not muddled and reading the "smooth flowing meanderings," and the way it develops is a pleasure Ona.

Paulami said...

agreedvwith devu word to word..and as i keep on saying, you have a flow..don't restrict it :)

freewriter-living between the lines said...

thank u guys..means a lot. will keep flowing. : )

tumblingwords said...
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tumblingwords said...

You use humour and sarcasm so well and now elegance and metaphoricity. Loved the post. Hope to read more fiction from you along with the funny stuff. Keep them coming! :D

Wellspring Of The Soul said...

I love your blog! I have always been interested in boats, even studied Naval Architecture a while....I enjoyed your incredibly creative post, very nicely done!! Best wishes.

Wellspring Of The Soul said...

Please, continue to write!! Very interseting Creative Writing! You are incredibly talented.